This is Gail’s first version, written across pages, with speech bubbles to add a bit more detail to her story. Her writing is a great mentor text for the young writers she teaches.
This is a second version of the same story that Gail can keep in her conferring toolkit. This is a more “bare bones” version that Gail can use to teach kids how to add more to their pictures, and more to their writing. She also made some mechanical mistakes on purpose so that she could use this to teach editing.