Better Lights On Our Streets by Barb Auch

In Barb’s classroom, she has Chromebooks for all of her kids, so she practiced using her own Chromebook to start a draft of her persuasive essay about the need for better lighting in her neighborhood.

Barb used her writing notebook (the paper kind) to free write and brainstorm ideas. She also used it to develop a thesis statement, and even to plan out boxes and bullets. Once she settled on a plan for her essay in her notebook, she moved out of the notebook to the Chromebook. Moving to the Chromebook is just like moving to looseleaf paper.

First she typed in her boxes and bullets. It helps kids to have their boxes and bullets typed right into the Google Doc when they get ready to draft. 

More or brighter lights on our streets would be safer for our neighborhood.

* More or brighter lights on our streets would be safer for our neighborhood because it will deter mischief.

* More or brighter lights on our streets would be safer for our neighborhood so that people can see where they are walking better.

* More or brighter lights on our streets would be safer for our neighborhood because it would feel more inviting.

Next, Barb started drafting each of her supporting paragraphs:

More or brighter lights on our streets would be safer for our neighborhood because it would deter mischief.  For example, has your house ever been egged?  Luckily ours has not, but my neighbors have.  This usually happens in the summer when more kids are out later in the evening. Also, break ins to cars is another happening.  Finally, I have seen vandalism to mailboxes on occasion. Having better lighting could help all of us to spot trouble and identify for the police more details of the occurrence.

More or brighter lights on our streets would be safer for our neighborhood so that people can see where they are walking after the sunsets. First, the other night I  walked home from my friend’s house two streets over.  Although it isn’t far, there are sections that are extremely dark.  I felt anxious and walked quickly in those spots. Second, it is not only the concern of meeting a stranger or groups of people that is worrisome. Not being able to see sticks, a rock, dog poop etc… is also a safety issue.

More or brighter lights on our streets would be safer for our neighborhood because it would feel more inviting.  A well lit area gives people the sense of comfort and safety. Much like, having a night light on in the hall at night.  Being able to see where you are going, gives you the sense of security. Another example, kids who hang out at night on the street can be seen and they would be able to see what is around them such as other people, cars and animals.

Next, Barb will draft an introduction and conclusion for her essay. Finally, she’ll do some revision work and editing to create a finished piece.

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